November 2011
18 posts
Head over heals in vibrant hues
of incandescent ocean blues
Happily wading the eternal depths
of soft coral kisses and whispering breathes.
To seek out the soul that holds my own
bereft of all the skin and the bone
behind the guise of mortal shell
where melded hearts pulsate and swell.
…
How it might have
would have
could have
been.How it was.
How you should call me.
How I should call you.
How we should talk.
How we should (re)connect.
How I miss you.How you and I
could’ve made
something
out of we.(if we tried)
How I can’t say we tried.
How I never lied.
How the love never died.How I’m all out of whats and whys
and have nothing left
but you and when.
I think it’s pretty awesome how someone can just look at you & know how you’re feeling without you having to say anything.. & how a person can know you that well. It’s amazing.
Don’t judge me on my past actions. Don’t judge me at all.
The good person inside me isn’t gone, she is me.
But there are always two sides. Don’t disregard the bad in me either.
Accept me as I am.
Before reading Levertov’s The Function of the Line, I had never thought about how my use of line breaks or punctuation affected my poems. In fact I don’t think I cared very much, but now i see how important the it is to not only the reading of one’s work, but the understanding of it. You see when I write, I write exactly as the words come to my mind. I don’t arrange words or sentences. I purge my mind of its thoughts in the exact order it comes to me. So for example in class we did an exercise of moving the punctuation in a prose work to different places. I know without a doubt that the melody of my poems will change and they just might be virtually misunderstood because it was not read as I intended. “To incorporate these pauses in the rhythmic structure of the poem can do several things: for instance it allows the reader to share more intimately the experience that is being articulated: and by introducing an a-logical counter rhyme into the logical rhythm of syntax it causes as they interact an effect closer to song than to statement, closer to dance than to walking.” THis reading has made me change the way that I think about punctuation particularly in my poetry. I am definitely going to be playing with different ways of using punctuation and line breaks to change the oral reading of my work.